Jayy Von Monroe - Uncoloured

So here's my quick, uncoloured, unrevised sketch of Jayy Von Monroe. I'm not quite sure how I feel about it, my scanner cut off the top bit of his hair :L And the tattoo is a fail -.- But, I dunno, what do y'all think? Bearing in mind, I haven't revised this yet, I usually just revise them as I colour.
The list:
Dahvie Vanity 1st sketch - [link]
Dahvie Vanity - [link]
Jayy Von Monroe 1st sketch - HERE
Jayy Von Monroe -[link]
Andrew Biersack 1st sketch - [link]
Andrew Biersack - [link]
Ashley Purdy 1st sketch -[link]
Ashley Purdy - [link]
Jake Pitts 1st sketch -[link]
Jake Pitts - [link]
Jinxx 1st sketch -[link]
Jinxx - [link]
CC 1st sketch - [link]
CC - [link]
Feedback?
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-DemiMajestics